Chapter 6: Beast from Air
Not the best sign…
Dear Journal,
I asked the grownups for a sign a few days ago and, well we got one. Sam n’ Eric saw the beastie when we were sleeping. They were at the signal fire and they say they saw it flailing, and it had wings, and claws, and fangs… but it didn’t catch them. I’ve been thinking, and if it was such a scary beastie with wings and claws, how could Sam n’ Eric escape it alive? It doesn’t seem likely. I think that the wings they saw were like a parachute or something, and the creature bobbing its head; it could be a human and the wind making it move. I want to check it out. The boys n’ I weren’t aware that it was possibly a human because Sam n’ Eric were so terrified. They were so scared because their imagination got a hold of them and they honestly thought that the beastie was after them. I don’t think there is a real beastie because it would have caught someone by now.
It’s hard being the leader but I still like it. I think I have authority over everyone, but it feels like Jack is starting to go waxy, and like he wants his own power. I hope he stays sane until we get rescued. I feel pressured to keep everything in order on the island, but also make it fun and laid back. I don’t think that anybody is super happy with me. They think that the assemblies sound interminable. Simon is the only one that diffidently talks in the assemblies, everybody else yells. Jack yells even if he doesn’t have the conch. Jack mutinously talks in assemblies. I don’t think I own a lot of authority over him.
-Ralph
Not the best sign…
Dear Journal,
I asked the grownups for a sign a few days ago and, well we got one. Sam n’ Eric saw the beastie when we were sleeping. They were at the signal fire and they say they saw it flailing, and it had wings, and claws, and fangs… but it didn’t catch them. I’ve been thinking, and if it was such a scary beastie with wings and claws, how could Sam n’ Eric escape it alive? It doesn’t seem likely. I think that the wings they saw were like a parachute or something, and the creature bobbing its head; it could be a human and the wind making it move. I want to check it out. The boys n’ I weren’t aware that it was possibly a human because Sam n’ Eric were so terrified. They were so scared because their imagination got a hold of them and they honestly thought that the beastie was after them. I don’t think there is a real beastie because it would have caught someone by now.
It’s hard being the leader but I still like it. I think I have authority over everyone, but it feels like Jack is starting to go waxy, and like he wants his own power. I hope he stays sane until we get rescued. I feel pressured to keep everything in order on the island, but also make it fun and laid back. I don’t think that anybody is super happy with me. They think that the assemblies sound interminable. Simon is the only one that diffidently talks in the assemblies, everybody else yells. Jack yells even if he doesn’t have the conch. Jack mutinously talks in assemblies. I don’t think I own a lot of authority over him.
-Ralph
Julia-
ReplyDeleteGood job! I like it! The journal entry is well written and I didn't catch any grammar or spelling mistakes. The only things I would recommend are to state whose perspective you are writing in (in this case: Jack) and maybe lengthen it a little if possible. All in all, nice work! :)
-Matty
HEY! I like it... i would give you good points for eveything also you included picture and it mathces the chapter and what you wrote. YOU KNOW I LOVE MATCHING...:]
ReplyDeleteYou have a picture, he length is great, you were very descriptive,you have vocab words, overall very nice. You should bold the vocab words so we no that they're our vocab. You should also write the perspective that you're writing in (I believe it's Ralph)
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